SCRIPT

By Anonymous -

Scene one
(Scene starts)
Sam is in the toilet and the camera is facing him when a group of boys walk into the toilet block
Jonny – Mate I’m fucking dying for a piss
Cam – same here bruv  
(Pushes past the boys and runs to the loo)
Tyler– Oi, did you shag that bird last night then
Jonny – ragged her mate
Danny – proud of you bruv
Tyler– anyone else up for sparking one
(Cam quickly turns around)
Cam – Bs
Danny – Cs
Jonny – well there’s no point me calling Ds is there, there will be fuck all left
Tyler– sorry hard (pause) Jonny hurry up and go for a piss I want to go rec
Jonny – you lot go, I’ll catch up 
(The boys leave but Jonny stays and turn around to go to the loo)
Scene two
(Scene starts)
The boys have left and Jonny is finishing going to the loo, he hears the pill pot drop and turn round and starts to walk towards where he think the noise is coming from
Jonny – you okay in there 
(Looking at the doors)
Sam – yeah I’m fine
(As Sam is trying to pick up all the pills in a rush)
(Jonny sees a few pills on the floor)
Jonny – what are you doing in there?
Sam – I said I’m fine
Jonny – look whatever you’re doing in there it’s not worth it
Sam – I said I’m fine, anyway it’s none of your business
Jonny – yeah you’re right I will leave you to it  
(Starts to walk away then stops near the door)
(Sam takes a pill)
(Jonny turns back)
Jonny – I know it wasn’t my business but it is now, look I’m not here to tell you what to do and what not to do but I’m here if you want to talk.
(Sam takes another pill)
(Four second pause)
Jonny – I get it, I get what you’re feeling. You feel like you’re not worth it, no one cares, you’re all alone, there’s no point of you being here
(Sam takes another pill) 
Jonny – but none of that is true, let me help you
Sam - what’s the point, you’re a liar everyone leaves you at some point
Jonny – what do you mean?
Sam – people die everybody dies at some point so why not now right here no one will care
Jonny – I’m sure you parents would
Sam – really, my mum don’t give a shit
Jonny – I’m sure she does  
Sam – if my mum cared about me should wouldn’t of left, she wouldn’t have left me at the lowest point of my life. I get it she was heartbroken what parent has to go through losing a child but he was MY brother and all she does is leave, what type of fucking parent does that
(Sam takes another pill)
(Three seconds pause)
Jonny – I’m sorry mate, I totally forgot but I get it. Not a lot of people know but about 5 years ago (pause) my sister killed herself, she wasn’t happy with her life, I still don’t know why but I could see her starting to fade away and then one day she’s gone. The worst thing is I knew she wasn’t alright but I just ignored it and its plays on my mind most day I think of her. I was so close to her and then I had no one until I met my boys and I will do and try anything to keep them. (pause) look, If you leave you dad, I know how he would feel, you are everything to him think about it he would have no one as you are his everything. I get it, you feel like he would be fine without you as he has got through losing your brother and then his wife leaves him but I don’t think he could deal with losing you imagine if it was the other way around.
Scene three
(Scene starts)
Jonny is against the toilet door still talking to Sam.
Jonny – look, please let me in
(Sam takes pill)
Sam – no leave
Jonny – I’m not going anywhere
Sam – I SAID LEAVE
Jonny – I’m not going anywhere
(Sam takes pill)
Sam – please please leave 
Jonny – whether you like it or not I’m not going anywhere I’m staying. I’m not leaving you I’m not going to watch you fade away too
(Sam takes pill)
Sam – I’m not worth your time
(Sam takes the last pill)
Jonny – you are Sam
Sam – no I’m not all you care about is doing drugs
Jonny – yeah (pause) that’s what people think
Sam – anyway there no point even trying any more
(Sam takes the last handful of pills and cam ears the pill pot drop0
Jonny – please let me in
(Jonny then looks under the door and sees the pot)
(Jonny stands up and is trying to get into the loo)
(Cam coming in laughing to see what was taking Jonny so long)
Cam – fucking hell bruv what’s been going on here
Jonny – call 999
(Cam runs out)
(Jonny is trying to break down the door but it’s not working)
Jonny – Sam, Sam open up, please Sam
(Cam runs back in and sees Jonny trying to get down the door so he starts to help)
Jonny – SAM
(The door breaks down)
(Sam is lying on the floor passed out) 
Cam – what have you fucking done jonny                                    

Comments

  1. EdgyMedia8 May 2018 at 05:09

    NJO - I like that you leave the audience on the cliffhanger and think that there could be some really interesting messages and dialogue between Jonny and Sam. One thing will be to show the time passing - is this something that happens in the space of 5 minutes? Personally I think a longer period of time might be really effective, especially if the ending is dramatic and tense. How would you show time passing? Will Cam come in earlier? Will you have shots of Jonny on his phone? Change in lighting etc?

    I think the next step for you will be to really work on your characterisation of Sam and Jonny. It is unclear from your script whether they are friends or not and the backstory is a little confusing in places. Make that really clear and publish character files for them both and then continue adapting your script.

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